My DP

My DP

Final Magazine Reflection.... (final take!)

What did you learn?

How did you learn in?

Why is this important?

I learned that simple and clear is Good. In past writings I would always try to have a complex idea involved in my writing. I would make an easy and simple idea into a bunch of sentences that wouldn't make sense at all. I simply thought that the more I wrote the more random and weird ideas that I threw in to the article it would make it more interesting. But reading some of the articles that my partners wrote I noticed that the ones with the easiest words and simple ideas were the ones I felt more attracted to. The ones with "big words" and "complex ideas" that I didn't really understand I wouldn't finish reading. I realized that the simpler and easy to read that I kept my article the better would be. I think this is important because if I write exactly what I understand and know instead of writing of a bunch of ideas that I don't get, the easiest will be for the reader to get my message, after all that's what we write for, so that someone not only reads but gets and understands the message.

I learned that there should be more than one hook.
During the past lessons about writing that we've had with Randy the idea of having a hook in the headline or the first paragraph was mentioned so many times that I never realized that we needed something to "re catch" the attention at the conclusion. In other words that a piece of writing must finish strong too. I hearted so many times "leave the reader thinking about it". I now I get that this could be a really effective way. Create "hooks" at the final sentences too. Not to keep the reader reading , but thinking.

Oraginallity and creativity are necesary for an outstanding article.
I know writing clear and right to the point makes good articles, but adding a little bit of creativity to it can make it even better. I can't say I learned this by writing my article, truth is I don't know how to do this yet. But going through my partners work showed me that the most outstanding ones were the ones that had something that no one else did. The use of originality and maybe a little bit of humor can help a lot and can be a hook too. Two great examples to this are Wyatt Watt's article and Luke's Article.

I learned that structure can vary.
Even though good intro or a hook in the intro is always necsery it does'nt have to be the thesis that completes this. In past pieces of writting I would always have the thesis as the intro and explained it through out the rest of the body. But now I 've realized that I can explain the thesis through out the article just explainit well and "making the point" trough different ways of evidence. All of this with out making it dirty or confusing. Just focusing in one point and how to prove it.

I learned a lot in through this project. through the teaching, the writing of my article and the reading of other people's articles, it was all a great experiance.

Reflection take #2

1. Overall, when you think about the big picture of your writing, what improved? How did it get better? Why? The structure in my past writtings used to be always the same.The thesis would be in the intro and the rest of the paragraphs would be somehow conected but all about the same idea. In this article I think I improved because I wrote my thesis all over the place but it was still pretty clear, and the paragraphs stayed on the "same page" but were more related then ever only that each one with a different twist. all the same story in different paragraphs with out getting borring and over repeated. Another thing that i improved in is that This article actually has an "so what?" awenser to it. I give out help from personal expiriance that is explained all over the article. Straight forward ideas of how to not have my problem.

2when you think about the big picture of your writing, what still needs work? What do you think will help you improve? Why? I think I should involve more things to my writting. "connect it to the real world". I should go farther than just what happened and how to fix it, I should look for the WHAT CAUSED IT?, but I'm just to closed minded and think that things happen just because, with out looking for the reason. I should do this because my writting would have more substence to read and would explain itself better with out me using so many words.

3. Specifically, show us something that improved and describe the path it took to get better. You can quote your article, your drafts, link to evidence, etc.
I changed a lot of "ings" the first 4 drafts of article were full of ings ei.
"Choosing an internship that will satisfy your goals and preferences" was changed to "my hope before you choose your internship is that..." another thing that I changed is my headline from "who is choosing your internship?" to "will choose you internship" I made this in a way that woulndt include an "ing" in it and that it would start and finish with strong words.

4. Describe something specific (or a few things!) that you learned about writing.
-I learned that the hooks of the article should be in the begging but they can always be in the end too. The writing should finish strong.

-I also learned that keeping it clear and simple is GOOD. No need to use "big words" or slamer words that only make the article be longer and boring.

- Copyediting. Before this project I would never really pay to much attention to the format of the article. It was more like going to rewrite sentences, go through the thesis a million times, etc... but never payed attention to the way I wrote out the numbers or the miss spellings that I had. But With this proect I realized how important they are because a simple word can change the meaning or intensity of a sentence, or it can make the wrtting look "unprofessional".

Reflection on the magazine take #1....

#1 What went well for me during the process of creating this magazine?

The idea of creating a brand new article instead of using something I already had was awesome for me. Instead of being lazy and just revising past drafts, I created I knew article. It probably took me more time to do this, but I'm happy about it because in m article I tell about some of my experience and how much I disliked it, So I was complaining in a professional way. And another thing that is good is that my article will hopefully help future inters during the process.

#2 What challenges did you face as you moved from an early draft or idea to a final product?

I ran out of ideas. I Had the article done but it still needed another bullet point with help for the reader, but I couldn't think of one. But then Randy's wife help me with some ideas and it finally worked out.

#3 What other examples of work—student and professional—stood out as exemplary and served as a good model for your own work?

Sidney Lampe's did. Because we did the same thing, she wrote an article about her experience and so reading through her stuff and how she kept critiquing even when it was done, it made realize that I should kelped on revising my work.

Internship Photo Essay....

It is Leticia’s first time giving birth. She’s shaking. She’s nervous. Morning sickness, cramps, mood swings, weird cravings, and a mortal fear of her body not being the same again. At the age of 17 she already had to go through all of this. Now all that matters is that little being that is inside of her and it’s about to come out. Leticia’s mother brought her from Mexico right after she found out her daughter was pregnant. She was certainly thinking of a better place for her to live. A better place for her granddaughter to grow up. Seven months have passed now since everyone else found out. And now they are here at the hospital waiting for the receptionist to tell her which way to go. The labor and delivery department is waiting for her now. And Leticia can’t wait to meet her new baby. Lots of stories like this one come alive in a hospital. Most of them full of hope, but there are sad stories too.

Two sisters are about to loose their mom. They’ve been sitting right next to her all night. She hasn’t talk in two days. That heart attack brought her down. And they can not believe it. The strongest woman they now, the one that raised both of them is now dying before them in the hospital bed. The two sisters don’t know what to do they can’t picture their lives without their mama. Yesterday they heard one of the nurses say that they didn’t have much hope on Mrs. Close recuperation. Now all there is left to do, is to wait in that big lobby and hope for the best. And pray for the best. Maybe go to that small chapel inside the hospital and ask God for a little bit more of time with their mom.

Kathy is 79 years old. I’ve heard that when you turn her age is hard to move, to breath and sometimes is hard to live. Last night She had a little problem, she fell of her bed. She lives at her son’s house. Her granddaughter lives with her son also. She’s a not really well mannered teenager. She listens to her music in a really high volume. One of the reasons they couldn’t hear poor Kathy when she fell of bed last night. She was screaming for about 45 minutes. Until her son heard something and came to help her. If it wasn’t because she broke her leg they’ve would of probably put her back to bed, but they had to take her to the hospital. When they got there the nurses where nice. Dr. Collins took care of her leg and she was ready to go home, at least that’s what Dr. Collins thought. Because she didn’t want to go home. She wanted to stay around people that cared for her. At home there is none.

Little Nathan has spend most part of his life in a hospital. The Doctors said that Leukemia was bringing him down, and he wouldn’t last long. Nathan is tired now. He doesn’t have any energy left, he’s scared. He’s Elementary school friends are coming to visit today, but he’s afraid he wont be able to be with them for a long time, he wants to sleep a little bit more before the doctors come in again. His mom has stayed in the hospital lobby many times. Worried about what’s going to happen to her little one. Another chemotherapy session, another day. She’s tired of this but keeps on going for him. Even if that means spending more time at the hospitals chapel than her own house.

It takes only 15 minutes sitting in a hospital lobby to listen to how hard life can get when a health problem is part of it. People that stays all night waiting to hear how that surgery went, or that ran to the hospital because they had a “false alarm” with the new baby. A really sad face comes through that door, but then a happy one walks through the other one. A lot of feelings and emotions throughout this lobby. Happiness, anguish, sadness, fear of what might happen. That’s life in a hospital, everyone tries to trust that they’re in the right place with the right people, and they’ll help them fix the problem. A lot of different things go on in this lobby. Even lunch for an intern. Going through her own hospital story too.

2. How could immersion impact your experience as a student?

I think this will impact my life as a student a lot. The truth is I'm having a really bad experience at my internship. I'm doing my internship at Scripps, and at first I thought that would be good, it was a hospital right were I wanted. But I didn't expect I would end up in the cafeteria area, and with a dietitian as my mentor. I'm not wearing scrubs and taking care of sick people or newborn babies. I'm going to that little room in the back of the kitchen (with a hairnet on) and I'm not doing much. Not that I don't want to I just don't know what to do. My mentor is a really busy person so she's expecting me to do things that I don't know how to do and I can't do them. And of course She's not there to "mentor me" and explain me how to do them. I'm not working with her, or learning from her. I'm just doing EXTRA work in the area. How is this impacting my student life? I like school. I appreciate my teachers. I like people telling me WHAT I'm supposed to do and HOW to do it. So I'm happy to be here. Be back. During immersion, I'll I could think of was coming back and having a normal student life. no more nasty work. Boring useless work. seriously any of our projects can help the world better than internship. This is how internship impact me as a student, I want to be a student not an employee.

My PreDiCtiOnS 4 IntErNsHIp ImMeRSioN....

1. What are you most excited about in regards to your immersion experience? I am really exited about the idea of being in a hospital environment. Why do you feel this way? Because i think i want to be a nurse when i grow up. So being around doctors and nurses is really interesting. Even though I'm in the nutrition department and I'm not dealing with blood, I feel like this will be a good learning experience. And by the time I'm done I'll know if this is really the type of environment I want to work on.
2. What are you most concerned about (what causes the most stress) regarding immersion? The idea of not having enough things to do. People here are really organized, therefore they don't need help. They have everything under control. So this can be kind of stressful, or boring I should say. Also the project. I don't have one yet that is really stressful, they don't need major changes here so I don't know what I'll do about my project.Why do you feel this way? People here is really busy to have an intern, that's why I feel this way.

How do I prove this? I wrote my blog during internship, that's how busy I am.

going through everyone's blog...

Economic advice to Barack Obama...

I found this blog really interesting because it relates to the same basic idea I had for Obama. I talked about creating jobs, but I just said what to do and what not to do. In Chandler Hood's blog I found a HOW. A plan for Obama, that goes farder than just stormbraining about what to change, it's more like how to change it. That's whay I liked this Blog.

Here's part of his plan...

"All companies with an annual revenue of $500 million or more that choose to sell their products in America must base at least 10% of their manufacturing workforce in America."

Historical Writing...

For this category I liked Evan Lott's blog. The way he writes about history may not be that deep, but it is really easy to understand, and easy evidence like quotes are in it. His writing is more an overall analysis of the topic. Here are some sentences of his writing which I concider really easy to understand and get into.

"The populist were their own party, but some of them worked within the democractic party. in the election of 1896 the populists were at a crossroad, stuck between gold and silverites."

Literary Analysis....

This is a paragraph from Sophie Santiago's honors blog. Even though there isn't much of an overall analysis. She took apart one of the literary devices (character) and described very well. She explained what the literary device called character is, and at the same time what the character was in the book that she's reading.

"One literary device in the book, The island of Dr. Moreau written by H.G. Wells, is character. There are three main characters, Dr. Moreau, Montgomery, and Prendick. Prendick an English man and is smart but not as smart as the other characters, Dr.Moreau and Montgomery. He is not really talked much about in the book but you can tell he is one of the characters who is doing his very best to survive on the island. I would Montgomery’s character as puzzled or confused. On the island he was looked down on by Dr. Moreau. In Dr. Moreau’s eyes he was seen as, “imperfect”. He was obsessed with Drinking and having power. Dr. Moreau, in my opinion the most stubborn character. I say that because he was obsessed with perfection and in his opinion everything was imperfect. So he used his science based knowledge to create creature like animals, which really was far off from being perfect. But in Dr. Moreau’s eyes that was seen as perfection."

Descriptive blog's...

For my own category I choose Descriptive blog. I didn't look for a good descriptive piece of writing. I was looking for a simply GOOD piece of writing so I went to Will Schrenkeisen's blog, and I found a well, funny blog about himself. What made it good and funny? the description that he gives to everything. And that's how I got my Descriptive blog category. Here is a small taste of it.

"For the sake of detail, this man was a little taller than me and possessed a reasonable degree of courtesy, but I could sense that he wondered what the hell I was doing in such an austere business environment."

Obama, here's an idea ...

If I had the opportunity to give some advisement to our new president I would start with the whole idea of cutting down taxes. In my opinion the best way to go about money is investing it. Yes, maybe it would be nice to not have to pay that extra dollar when we buy our new jeans, but wouldn't it be better to actually have a well job, and not have to worry about that extra dollar because we have a stabled salary.
If the new president and the government make better decisions about spending money in creating jobs, instead of supporting people that DON'T have jobs that would help them more. Maybe at first when we don't get jobs or tax cuts, we as citizens wouldn't understand and would reveal against Obama, but eventually it would be better and more effective.

In 1961 John F. Kennedy talked about the economic recovery and how it should relate to jobs. He said: "Expansion and modernization of the nation's productive plant is essential to accelerate economic growth and to improve the international competitive position of American industry ... An early stimulus to business investment will promote recovery and increase employment." If JFK lived that would probably be one the advisement he would have for Obama. Create more of the good stuff that the country has and take advantage of it.

If Obama is not careful enough and instead of creating jobs he lets only the big companies be in charge of the job percentages and take control in that matter. It can happen the same tragedy that occurred during the Gilded age. Industries owning peoples lives and week people letting them do it because of the great necessity they had. It may sound a little bit extreme and over the top to compare this time we are going through to the gilded age, but it is always a possibility to go back to the same mistakes we once made. The great depression is a good example of regression instead of moving forward.

Another thing I would tell Obama is to be more careful and strict about the billouts the goverment gives to the companies. You should be more cheap when it comes to spending money on them and ask for better excuses from them. That way the money will be spend more wisly and thinking more about the people that don't have even a job, and not concentrating on the few CEO's of this world.

Interview Principles...

1-The "Well Though Questions" principle.
I want my interview to have questions that can make the interviewee keep talking, and giving not just a lot of information but good information. Here are two links. One to a bad interview, this one being full of "yes or no" questions, in fact the interviewee has to make the conversation interesting. in the second interview you can tell the interviewer having more flexibility to go over a certain topic.
Bad interview
Good Interview

2- "Integrating background knowledge Principle"
Interview transcripts

3-Good use of "Background Info" This is an interview to Miley Cyrus. The interviewers have a lot of background information, they throw a topic that people want to hear about, but ask how that certain topic happened.
Hanna Montana Interview.

Questions for my mentor!

Jannete VanKouve
Dietitian at Scrips Mercy hospital, Chula Vista.
By: Kaory Hirata
1 What made you be interested on becoming a dietitian?
2 How did your family and friends supported you in the idea of being a dietician?
3 What's your education based on? (What type of dietician,etc...)
4 What college did you go to and what expiriance did you have there?
5 How did you end up working here at scripps?
6 What do you enjoy the most about working here?
7 Do you have another job besides the one you have here? What is it? if not would you like to have one?
8 For how long have you been working here?
9 What inspires you to work at Scripps and not other hospitals?
10 Did you ever do an internship before starting to work?
Do you have a little story about it?
11 What expiriences do you have from having another interns before?
12 What do you do to keep up with the new info that is coming out in the dietician field?
13 Do you have any heroes in this field? who? and why?
14 How would you describe yourself?
15 How does being a dietitian impact your personal life? by that I mean eating, etc...
16How does your proffesion impact the people around you?
17 How do you handle your time?
18 What are your hobbies?
19 If you could change your proffesion what would you change it for?
20 How important do you think the work you do here is?

My Internship... it will soon come....

My first day of internship was really disappointing because I didn't even get to go. Sense I need to have 2 MMP shots, and I only have one, I have to wait another 2 weeks till I get my second shot. The reason I need these is that I will be doing my internship at Scripps Mercy Chula Vista. When working at a hospital you can not get patients sicker than What they already are. So getting shots is a good way to prevent it. I meat my Mentor a couple weeks ago, and I went to the area where I will working. She is a really nice person, and apparently he is very exited of having me, or "someone" to work with her and help her around. The place is obviously very clean and full of Mexicans. I'm really exited to start and I hope it happens soon.

I promise I'll update this post, as soon as I start my internship.

John F Kennedy Speech, and the current events...

John F. Kennedy’s Speech, contradictory to our current news….

Kennedy’s inauguration speech was given on January 20^th 1991. His main points during the speech were hope, change and being friends with other countries. This speech definitely reminds me of new president Barack Obama’s inaugural speech. Both men have the same ideals -change and hope for America. They both have expressed this ideals any time they had the chance. The difference between these two men is that, Obama has the dreams of many Americans in his hands, people that trust him, and he also has his future coming. John F. Kennedy hope’s for America vanished away and he no longer had a chance to realize his dreams for this country. His speech is now relevant in the actual days in a very contradictory way to what he wanted to see happening in this country. During his speech he mentioned a few things that are nothing like what he wanted.

Kennedy said during his speech: “remember that, in the past, those who foolishly sought power by riding the back of the tiger ended up inside”

Kennedy was referring to the people that tried to get power in the past and were consumed by it. Obviously when Kennedy was referring to the “past”, he was saying this could not happen any more, at least during his government.

A few presidents later Bush came in, this being his second time as a president and ironically said: "I earned capital in the campaign, political capital, and now I intend to spend it." Since the beghinning he knew what his deals were, and he was going to take advantage of it. This meant that all the power that he had would be completely used and not necessarily to do the best that he could for America, but to do the best that he could for himself. Now after he is gone we can be sure of this because of the way his decisions worked.

He made lots of mistakes during his time in the White House, mistakes that don’t only affect our economy but produce more suffering in the human race. For example, he didn’t quite spend the country’s money in the best way. When it was time to be careful with the money he spent it in some war with Afghanistan, but when the money really needed to be spent because New Orleans needed help during the tragedy of hurricane Katrina, he acted slowly and with non effective ways. The food supplies and buses for people that were supposed to come from him weren’t there on time. Three years later January on 12^th Bush admitted at his final news conference as president that Talking about Katrina Bush said: “Could things have been done better? Absolutely, Absolutely”. We all know that, things could definitely have been worked out better. he didn’t act in the best way.

Another one of his mistakes was the entire idea of accusing Iraq for making weapons, and basically starting war. It has been 5 years now, and he still has no proof of that. But he still talks about it as if he was right making that decision. Bush said on January 13^th: “I am comfortable with what we did and it was necessary to protect the country”. Apparently for him killing people from other countries, and giving away the lives of many Americans is “protecting the country”.

Don’t you just feel like throwing your shoe at him? I am sure John F Kennedy would.

John Kennedy refers to war when he says: “To those nations who would make themselves our adversary, we offer not a pledge but a request: that both sides begin anew the quest for peace, before the dark powers of destruction unleashed by science engulf all humanity”. Kennedy was not planning to have the United States in a war, in fact he had a solution to not get there. But while he asked negotiation and understanding of problems from each country, the country he once was president of invades Iraq, and does not plan to leave until the Iraqi’s government is completely well settled, and that will obviously take time and more lives.

This war brings to our minds a large and important part of it, our America soldiers. When Kennedy refers to the country in his speech he says; “Since this country was founded, each generation of Americans has been summoned to give testimony to its loyalty”. He was referring to how we should all work together to make the country grow, but when hi referred to soldiers he said: “The graves of young Americans who answered to the call to service surround the globe”. Again he was talking about the past, and making it seem as if it would never happen again. Right now many American soldiers have died in the Iraq war and the ones alive are still risking their lives.

John F. Kennedy was full of hope and dreams. He was planning to leave everything in the past and move on, no more war, no more “selfish” politics. Everything went away and was erased from American minds, but the hope now is born again with Obama.

Obama's ignauguration speech....

"We are a nation of Christians and Muslims, Jews and Hindus-- and non- believers. We are shaped by every language and culture, drawn from every end of this Earth...".

I choose this section because I relate to 2 parts of this quote. First the christian part. I believe in Jesus and I base my personal life in that, and even though we all think that we are right and we wish that everyone else would believe in our own "religion", the truth is I don't see humanity going to the same church any time soon.
So when it comes to working as a team or building up a country spending time fighting about our believes is not a really smart thing to do. Obama describes our differences, and not only describes us as a nation, he describes us as a "diverse" nation. Not only because of our believes but when he talks about this country being "shaped" by different cultures.

I identify with the "culture" part of the speech because even though I was born here, I lived most part of my life in Mexico, and I know that my culture comes with me, and can be an influence to my American friends.

Now if we count the number of people that immigrate every day to this country and pay attention to the impact this people have to the American culture, will see how much it has change through the years.
When my dad was little he would eat "dinner" at 7:00pm, but when he grew up he married a Mexican women and even though he lives in the states, he eats his big meal, "dinner" at 3:00pm. Things in American life change, when a different culture comes in. The culture will never stay the same.
And Obama having an American Mother, African dad, and an Asian sister obviously understands cultures better than any other president.

1 outline of artist statment

Thesis: Desmond Doss and John Lennon lived for the same thing: “peace for all the people”, but they expressed it in two different ways, art and war.

1 Paragraph

- Desmond Doss

When I stared this project I was looking for a great soldier that died in the battle field or that had give his life to save someone else’s. Instead I found something better, the story of a great man, a soldier out of the ordinary. His name was Desmond T. Doss, he was a soldier during World War II. But there was something different about him that made him………, he saw the opportunity of destroying for peace as an opportunity to restore what was being destroyed. He had certain believes that made he’s world wider than the other ones. He didn’t believe in killing, his reason to be in the battle field wasn’t to destroy, but to save. Doss risked his life to save the life of other 75 soldiers, he went to the front line of the battle field and with out a single weapon to defend him self he carried back fallen soldiers and used he’s medical tactics to save them. Even though for some he might be the complete opposite of what a warriors do because instead of hurting he healed, I believe that this man never need a gun to prove that he was a real warrior, someone that fought for his dream, peace.

Include (religious thoughts)
Paragraph 2
-picture and transition to John Lennon
In my piece of art you can see Desmond Doss with his honor medal. The tombs represent other American soldiers that risked their lives like Doss did, but they didn’t make it. The words in the tombs are a quote from a song written by John Lennon, “Imagine”. I think the quote “nothing to kill or die for” is the one that best represents Desmond Doss because he believed in peace with out murder.

Paragraph 3
-John Lennon
This song also represents well the believes that John Lennon had.

Paragraph 4
-Quote and song, meaning (things going on in that time)

Paragraph 5
Conclusion
Despite there differences Demond Doss and John Lennon had at least the most important thing in common, what they lived for, peace for all the people.

One of Bush's controversys: "The enviroment"

The entire idea of Bush turning into one of the "most conservation-minded presidents" clashes with the very clear mistakes he made in the past. The article written by Katharine Mieszkowski "Bush's seven deadly environmental sins" has a very detailed list of the errors that Bush has done. For example "refusing to agree to mandatory greenhouse emission reductions", or the fact that he never developed well clean energy sources.

The author accompanies every "sin" with a solution proposed by Obama. And it also proposes ideas for Obama of how to not repeat the same mistakes, when she says: "Obama should develop a national task force" or "Obama should order the EPA to issue a waiver to California".

While this article focuses in Bush's mistakes and how Obama will fix them, Juliet Eilperin's article "Bush to protect three areas in pacific" talks about how great his idea of protecting three areas in the pacific is, and while every one else sees this as Bushes first well done act tors environment, Eilperin mentions "Bush's 2006 decision to create the papahanaumokuakea Marine National Monument in Hawaii and other smaller designations". But she also recognizes the mistakes he made "he has resisted imposing mandatory curbs on greenhouse gas emissions".

The facts of this controversy are layed out in many different ways, for example the great articles by Miezkowoski and Eilperin, it is now up to us to decide whether Bush forgot that he's against healthy environment or he simply wants to have a little more privacy when he goes fishing in the pacific.

Begining of Second Semester

Internship...

1. What do you hope to learn or discover about the "adult" world of work while you are at your internship?
I want to discover if it's really as hard as they say it is, and learn from areas I need to work on, in order to one they be part of this "adult"world and not feel intimidated by it.

2. What do you hope to learn or discover about yourself and your identity while you are at your internship this semester?
I want to discover how much can I handle and see how open I am to new things, and of course I would like to know if being a nurse i really what I want to do for life.

3. What goals do you have for yourself for your internship experience?
Learn how to handle a "job" and school at the same time, determine if being a nurse is really an option for me, learn how to make a project on my own and learn how to work with a team, in a social environment.